Carp Color or Floating World ~ for Carpe Diem’s Freestyle #001, Troiku Form

©13 Carp Color 6 sml 6x

 

 

Floating World

 

colors ripple

beneath the surface

carp watch

 

colors ripple

in this shallow depth

I breathe

 

surface blossoms

drift through the sky

silence

 

carp watch

I pause in my floating

meditation

 

Photo Painting

Troiku is a haiku related form. The troiku form was created by Kristjaan Panneman—Chevrefeuille. It consists of a “Sleigh” and three “Horses”—four haiku in all as one work.

This is one of my first attempts with the troiku form. I may not understand the troiku form completely. My troiku would break down like this:

 

The Sleigh:

 

colors ripple

beneath the surface

carp watch

 

Horse 1:

 

colors ripple

in this shallow depth

I breathe

 

Horse 2:

 

surface blossoms

drift through the sky

silence

 

Horse 3:

 

carp watch

I pause in my floating

meditation

 

I’ve chosen to include a title with my troiku. I do not know if this is appropriate or not. I felt with a title there was the suggestion that the four ku were meant as one work. This is something I’ve started to do with my haibun as well—that is, to include a title with the work, where as with stand-alone haiku I do not include a title with the work at all (even though I “title” the post).

My response to Carpe Diem’s Freestyle #001, in which I’ve chosen to attempt this troiku form ~ July 2013.

The informative challenge and responses to this challenge (as well as more information on the troiku form) can be found on the Carpe Diem Blog.

You are invited to respond as well.

Have fun. Explore haiku and related forms. Aloha—Rick

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